Lab #10

Part 1: Pruning


That reminded me of a situation that occurred at camp the past summer. Now I am a counsellor so I learn more about the campers’ lives in an emotional level. One evening, there was a program where the campers would write to their parents at home, without noticing one of my campers mother’s past away. I decided to approach this eight year old girl and I tried to open myself up to make her feel better. The one thing that I will always remember from this conversation as I told her that I don’t have a mom either she responded by saying “How are you so happy?”; I realized I am talking to an eight year old which is when they should not be worrying about anything however she feels that due to this event in her life she can no longer be happy.

This past summer I was a counsellor at camp. I learnt about the campers and their lives. One evening, there was a program where the campers would write to their parents at home. I decided to approach this eight year old girl who seemed awkward about this situation. She told me “she didn’t have a mom to write home to”. The one thing that I will always remember from this conversation was when I told her that I don’t have a mom she responded by saying “How are you so happy?”

Part Two: End it with Style

The death in the family will trigger many emotions. People say with time things get better but honestly it depends on the person and their support along the way. Having someone taken away from you is the hardest thing to deal with in our lives. I needed to deal with my mom dying at a young age but that was in the past the next thing is to focus in the future and deal with everyday obstacles. Finding a happy place, mine is being camp; doing things you love, mine is playing music; and being there for others in need. I am still a teenager, I need to still grow and even if my mom is not there following and teaching me what to do, I am not alone, it is important to laugh and know you could be happy.

Part Three: The First Sentence

  1. I wasn’t even there. I was at camp, my happy place, her happy place.
  2. My mom died while I was with my friends in my favorite place, camp.
  3. I learned to grow after the traumatic experience.
  4. I wasn’t with my mom when she died.
  5. I needed to experience the death of my mother when I was only fourteen years old.

Reading Response #9

Comments on Melia Tat’s 2nd draft:

Amazing article, I see that you are very passionate with what you are writing and talking about. You want to create a wider awareness to the issues of inequalities in many ways! Stereotypes are a huge issue that unfortunately we as a society need to deal with.  I like how you started your article saying how you and your mom do a walk which you are admired to do. It gives a very strong view of what you will be discussing within your article by stating how many people (Hundreds) who walked for a special cause. I like how you use questions because its questions that people don’t tend to say out loud however they are important to discuss. I like that from the beginning you use your example which gives us a broad idea of what will be mentioned. I really liked the ending sentence “…Wait, I just used a stereotype” because it shows your voice and humor in a matter that is needed to be spoken about and raised awareness. However, I would add more anecdotes and more rhetorical strategies such as pathetic arguments (Hypothetical or real examples).  Some things I would say is to review some of your grammar because there tends to be spelling mistakes so to do a few touch-ups. Overall I really enjoyed learning more about inequalities and a topic that should be heard more about.

Lab #9

Part One: Audience and purpose

  1. Adolescents after the death of a parent, age 12-18
  2. Hope to show teenagers who lost a parent they aren’t alone, there are different ways to react and grieve and you may think you are more unique than you actually are

Part Two: Outline, take two

  • Exposition: Personal event, paragraph
  • Complication: How could the death of a parent shape personalities of adolescents who lost a parent

-The personalities that are changed, needing to grow up, emotional,

psychological illnesses, bereavement groups.

  • Rising action: Events and research to prove points (Paperman & Sons, Hospital (Palliative Care), Reactions, Bullying)
  • Because of that: Sub-argument #1: Research, facts, ideas, dialogue, etc.
  • Because of that: Sub-argument #2: Research, facts, ideas, dialogue etc.
  • (repeat for as many sub-arguments as you have)
  • Climax: Who I am now.
  • Denouement:  There are many adolescents who go through the same issues as I am. Developmental issues are impacted from this experience. My views to this all changed because I originally wanted to see mental disorders only, I learnt that people grow and change. Teenagers who lose parents are different than many but they have a community of people who are always welcoming those in need with opened arms.

Lab #8

Part One: Organizing your ideas

How does the death of a parent as an adolescent impact the future life of the child?

  • How does one interact with a teenager in the grieving process?
  • How common/unique is the death of a parent as a teenager?
  • How does one cope with a large event where a parent should attend?
  • What support is needed?
  • What are different reactions teenagers could get?
  • What are the emotions?
  • How could emotions lead to psychological disorders?
  • Could the death of a parent influence the well-being of the child?
  • What is the most common illness after the death of a parent?
  • What is a psychological illness?

Part Two: It’s all about scenes & Part Three: Organize your scenes

List of scenes:

  • Discovering my mom’s death as I was about to eat breakfast at camp, my happy place
  • Going to the family hope and cope psychologist and walking out of the room
    • Being forced to get psychological help when it was unwanted and wanted to be alone
  • Being in palliative care, sleeping there for nights
  • The Shiva house, sitting on the uncomfortable chairs (Frogalina)
  • The funeral, no tears, there to support other family members
  • Bullies in high school laughing at me that I don’t have a mom
    • Living in fear that someone will hurt me, rumors behind my back, did stupid things to make me feel better
  • Ran the bereavement group in high school for other students who lost a parent
  • Seeing the ambulances outside Brady’s house as his mom was getting taken away from him and his family
    • Hearing the news that Debbie won’t be coming home
  • Having panic attacks very often re-picturing/ imaging the situation.
  • Thinking everything I do will trigger something else and leave in constant fear and panic
  • Recurrent memories and flashbacks to the event

Part Four: Creating an Outline